4 Comments

Favorite Lines from SANYARE (WIP), Chapters 1 – 5

Favorite Lines from SANYARE, chapters 1 -5

Ten of my favorite lines from my work in progress, SANYARE, chapters 1 – 5.

I don’t have anything earth-shattering to share this week. A lot of major rewrites are happening, specifically to the end of the first act, but I don’t think it will change my (new) first draft deadline much. Cross your fingers.

As a reward for your patience, here are some of my favorite lines from the first five chapters of SANYARE.  Enjoy!

.

.

.

~

Her right arm snapped out and up across the man’s body, drawing a horizontal figure eight across his torso, the razor-edged khukuri knife sliding through the soft tissue of his unprotected belly like a spoon through pudding.

~

If Garamaen was wrong, if his home was too human, she would immediately progress to her physical age, probably dying in agony as her skin shriveled, teeth and hair fell out, and muscles atrophied.

~

Palm trees rose high above the cliffs in the distance, absorbing the last dying rays of the sun, like pilgrims with arms raised in supplication to their god.

~

After decades of meals taken in this room, she knew each curve of the clematis vine that wrapped the ebony shield, and could tell you exactly how many flowers bloomed in the wood.

~

His hand brushed across her shoulders, an embrace that wasn’t.

~

A troll the size of a human bus lumbered into Rie, sending her careening into a stand filled with some kind of purple hard-skinned fruit that smelled like rotting fish.

~

His voice was smooth and seductive, sinking barbed tendrils of compulsion into Rie’s heart and mind.

~

“No harm, no foul.  And certainly no need to have naked blades in my reputable establishment.”

~

The theme of her outfit, if it could be described in one word, was ‘skin’.

~

Her lips receded from too sharp teeth, the skin of her face seeming to fold back as her jaw unhinged in preparation for attack.

 

Any of them strike your fancy? Which is your favorite?

Advertisements

4 comments on “Favorite Lines from SANYARE (WIP), Chapters 1 – 5

  1. Intriguing… I like the one about not bringing knives into somewhere because it gives the whole of the rest a sort of StarWars Cantina scene flavour, which appeals.

    Cheers

    MTM

    Like

  2. What I liked about them
    * the one about her outfits and one word “skin” —funny
    * flowers blooming in the wood—clever description
    ° and the embrace that wasn’t—cause I’ve been there
    Some great examples of why I love to read!

    Like

    • Thanks! I’m really enjoying the editing process, because now I’m finding lines so good I can’t believe I wrote them, and focusing on making the weak lines strong. It’s actually fun!

      Like

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: